The prompt for today's poetry challenge was to write a 12-bar blues poem. After reading the short description and samples as well as doing a bit of Googling I'm still not sure if I did it right! It was a challenge to write as I've never written this style or genre.. I think if I had more time I might have been able to do a bit better, but it was still fun to try!
I've already missed a couple of days of the poetry challenge. I'm discovering that as with meditation any discipline takes determination and practice. Creative writing is no exception. With spontaneous events continually arising in life it's easy to sweep personal goals and practices under our proverbial rug but when one finds they have gotten off routine it's essential to just keep going and pick up where you left off. So...that's what I'm doing today! Hope you enjoy!
Comments are always appreciated. Thank you!
I've already missed a couple of days of the poetry challenge. I'm discovering that as with meditation any discipline takes determination and practice. Creative writing is no exception. With spontaneous events continually arising in life it's easy to sweep personal goals and practices under our proverbial rug but when one finds they have gotten off routine it's essential to just keep going and pick up where you left off. So...that's what I'm doing today! Hope you enjoy!
Comments are always appreciated. Thank you!
The Door Won't Be Singing
At Sun's rising my dreams got up and flew away.
At Sun's rising my dreams did go and fly away.
No Stopping that old truck from going on its way.At Sun's rising my dreams did go and fly away.
Sadness, so thirsty, kissed my face and drank my tears.
Sadness, so thirsty, kissed my face and drank my tears.
If only she'd come and drink away those wasted years.
The door won't be singing here at night no more
The door won't be singing here at night no more
My baby's gone, won't be back, he's left my soul poor.
A stranger's in the mirror I have to get rid of
A stranger's in the mirror I have to get rid of
Mournful sight, sad sad plight, no help from above.
My baby's gone, won't be back, he's left my soul poor.
A stranger's in the mirror I have to get rid of
A stranger's in the mirror I have to get rid of
Mournful sight, sad sad plight, no help from above.
Filling my empty well with wine overflowing
Filling my empty well with wine overflowing
Going to leave this hell behind, gotta get going.
Love this, Jessica! Got me "singing the blues". :) Well done, my friend!
ReplyDeleteThanks Martha! Wasn't quite sure about this one! I have never really listened too much to blues nor read blues songs/poetry ...But I suppose there's a first time for everything. ;)
DeleteTruly blue Jessica. Well done, though a bit sad.
ReplyDeleteThanks Janaki. :) Yeah, I equate blues with sad but I know it's not always that way. In the description they gave they mentioned that blues can sometimes be humorous. I'm not too good at humor so I picked sad! :)
DeleteHello Jessica.
ReplyDeleteDefinitely has a bluesy flow to it. You did very well. I liked your words of reflection in the introduction too. Thanks for sharing.
Day 5: Empty Streams
Sadness so thirsty,kissed my face and drank my tears...awesome lines. Loved them.
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Beautiful! Those of you who participated in this challenge were inspiring!
ReplyDeleteJessica, you did a good job girl. I felt the sadness in this piece, but there was a lightness at the end. :-)
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WOW! I could feel this bluesy tune! "the door won't be singing at night here no more" I love that line! BEAUTIFUL!!! Happy Easter!
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Great job for a first time blues writer! I was lucky enough to have the opportunity to work with a songwriter a couple of years ago in a workshop and she taught us 12-bar blues. I found it easier this time to "set the mood" by playing a blues-themed station on Pandora while I wrote. Keep up the great work!
ReplyDeleteYou write beautiful blues, my dear. :)
ReplyDeleteThat is wonderful! "the stranger's in the mirror I have to get rid of" is an amazing line. Love it. Great job on this NaPoWriMo challenge.
ReplyDeleteHey, Jessica! You did an amazing job with the blues! There are some amazing lines here; I love the "Sadness" verse. Way to go. I was missing your poetry, so whenever you're writing it, I'll read it! <3
ReplyDeleteYou got me singin' the blues ;) I love love this Jessica! Actually I like the 12 bar blues poetry. You know how I like getting the rhythm in my body as I read.
ReplyDeleteVery very good!
I misread it at first as the door won't be swinging... which may be an interesting turn- it has music to it while also amplifying the entrance imagery that you're poetry notes as well. Keep up the good work!
ReplyDeleteI picture a guitar and a sad melody. Lovely.
ReplyDeleteVery bluesy, with great rhythm. Great job. Love the photo too. Did you take it?
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