I decided to try something different and skip the prompt for today. I've read some haiku's written by other participants and wanted to try writing my own. I'd love your thoughts!
Courtesy of: Google Images
Time
Time twisting, turning;
unfolding blossoms brown and
brittle, death's first kiss.
unfolding blossoms brown and
brittle, death's first kiss.
I wish I knew more about haiku! I love to write it, but stick to the 5-7-5 beat. You might want to edit and change "deaths" to "death's". The promise of opening blossoms vs death is appropriate for Good Friday.
ReplyDeleteOh I kept rewriting it so many times I thought it was in the 5-7-5 beat! oops! lol..Changed the grammar. ;) Thanks Tim! :)
ReplyDeletecool...nice indeed.
ReplyDeleteThanks Janaki. :)
DeleteNicely done, Jessica. This made me think of a Simon and Garfunkel song 'Leaves that are green turn to brown'.
ReplyDeleteThanks Corinne. :) I haven't heard a Simon and Garfunkel song in quite awhile..I'm going to have to listen to that one again! I love Simon and Garfunkel...one of my favorites is "The Sound of Silence." Thanks for stopping by. :)
ReplyDeletewow... you've done a great job; I love it... and very appropriate for today!
ReplyDeleteLovely indeed, Jessica! You certainly have the knack for poetry. :)
ReplyDeleteJessica: OMG! I think you have a natural gift! Brief, concise, but, far from superficial. Love it!
ReplyDeleteHello.
ReplyDeleteI haven't got a clue when it comes to all these poetry forms, but I know there's a thriving Haiku community out there. I'm impressed with your effort Jessica. Nice image choice too. Thanks for sharing.
Day 6: Forbidden Kisses
I've said it before and I'll say it again... today surely is a day for haiku.
ReplyDeleteWhen I was taking poetry classes online and had to write a haiku I was told that some of my words that I used did not exist in Japanese haiku. One was resurrection. I do know that you aren't suppose to capitalize any of the words and it cannot rhyme at all.
Glad to see you give it go. For all I know I am still using nonexistent words. lol
Great start. Hope you'll write more haiku. There are so many schools of thought out there. Not all haiku has to be 5-7-5, although I do find those to be somehow aesthetically pleasing. When you write a lot of them, you get a feeling for the rhythm of 5-7-5, so that you no longer need to count syllables. That said, I've read some amazing haiku that didn't follow these rules. Some modern ones don't even stick strictly to three lines.
ReplyDeleteCheck out the "innovative" haiku examples on Haiku Now's site, at the bottom of this page: http://www.thehaikufoundation.org/haikunow-innovative-haiku/#inno_examples
I don't know much about haiku, and to be honest I haven't done my research on it either. But your first attempt is more like you might have gotten it right the first time.
ReplyDeleteEither way its great writing even from a non haiku writing person.
Jessica, this was beautiful. There are many forms of haiku and this is one of the best I've read. Cheers!
ReplyDeletehttp://lyricfire.typepad.com/lyric-fire/2012/04/lyric-fire-napowrimo-2012-day-eight-of-30-poems-in-30-days-manna-moonbeams.html
I can appreciate a blog like this.....
ReplyDeleteHaiku is one of my favorite forms of poetry, Jessica. Shared this on G+
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Chris
I'd love to see you doing more haikus Jessica :)
ReplyDeleteWas it easy? You captured your theme's essence in such short verses :)